Tuesday, January 12, 2010

First Semester Portfolio-Piece I'd like to revise

The genre is a poem. It’s about calling my basement my Man Cave and where I go and my dad go a lot to play video games and watch sports and sometimes our family comes to watch recorded shows. The Man Cave (basement) is also where my drum set is so it can get pretty loud sometimes. The reason I created this poem is because I had to do a place poem and I didn’t know what to write about and I was in my basement and I was thinking and I decided that I should do my basement and call it a Man Cave because I kind of got my idea for Man Cave off of George Lopez but he called it something different. I think that I would change it by putting some similes in it and maybe trying to make it rhyme.

Man Cave

Ding as the TV shows its picture
Click as the stereo emits the sound
Drumstick choices
Click clacking of computer keys
Couch coaching, sweat trickling
Technology choices
Persistent banging
Game time
Competition
Lights dimming
Recorded shows
High definition
Family time
Laughter
The basement

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